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« on: July 09, 2016, 09:15:08 am »
If you're interested in Breast Expansion Via Implants, then you will hopefully enjoy most of my work.  The pen name, "Shadowmuse Blown" is new, but many of you may know some of my older works written under my old pen name (which I would ask you all as to be so kind as to not mention here), such as "Obsession" or "The Mouse".

I no longer use my old pen name because someone close to me learned of it, and I had to abandon it. 

I began the novel "Revenge" three years ago under my old pseudonym, and have been writing the story on and off ever since.  Currently, I am posting chapters of it on my "Revenge" blog, which is solely focused on that novel.  Eventually, I will convert the "Revenge" blog into a private one, accessible via a one time payment, but, for now, it is open for all to read.

"Revenge" is the story of Tory Avalon, who begins as a flat-chested hater of buxom women, and of Ken Brenner, who seems to be the man of her dreams, and who seduces her and convinces her to undergo surgery for expander implants.  Ken's agenda--for reasons that are revealed later in the novel--is to turn Tory into the very thing that she despises: a hyper-bosomy bimbo.  Along the way, Tory learns some interesting lessons.

Come on over to my "Revenge" blog and read about Tory's exploits.  I've just posted the second chapter.  A link is available in my signature, below.

Hope you enjoy it.  Please feel free to give me feedback and ideas, suggestions and constructive criticism.

Take Care!
~CH
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Re: Shadowmuse Blown
« Reply #1 on: July 09, 2016, 06:25:00 pm »
Nice story so far! Good work :)

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« Reply #2 on: July 09, 2016, 06:44:05 pm »
^Thanks!  Very kind of you!

By the way, I was just notified, this morning, that a default setting on the new blog was making it difficult for people to leave comments.  I believe I've fixed that and comments should be open for anyone to post.
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« Reply #3 on: July 09, 2016, 08:18:52 pm »
I like the story. There's a lot of detail on the psychological aspect of the characters. That really makes it much hotter than normal porn fiction.

Please continue.

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« Reply #4 on: July 11, 2016, 07:27:09 am »
Thank-you!  Very kind of you, sir.

I think it's important to hear what the characters are thinking, and get their point of view.  It's essential for us to understand Tory's thought process.  Why would someone who is such a strong-headed individual, and takes pride in using and discarding most men, suddenly transform her body for the pleasure of a man?  Here's a woman who took pride in being flatchested, and who ridiculed bosomy women as being stupid or *WOMAN*s (or both!), allowing herself to become busty all for the sake of a man.  Why would she do that?  Even with with her justification as to why she's doing it, there still has to be an inner mental battle going on about actually pumping herself up.  I find all of that fascinating, and as I post these first chapters of the novel, written a few years ago, I try to think: is her inner turmoil coming out for the reader?  I'm not sure, but I think that that inner struggle is hot as hell, and if I can capture it, then it works. 
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« Reply #5 on: July 19, 2016, 01:53:19 am »
Always been a fan of your work.  Great detail and quite a bit edgier than other stories. Can't wait to see new chapters of Revenge! Especially right after the seven part preview.

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« Reply #6 on: July 19, 2016, 03:37:05 am »
Always been a fan of your work.  Great detail and quite a bit edgier than other stories. Can't wait to see new chapters of Revenge! Especially right after the seven part preview.

Why, thank-you, sir!  Most kind of you!

If you're referring to the seven part "Christmas Interlude" posted on my old blog for the Christmas 2014 season, I'm afraid you will have a long wait!  That segment of the story takes place when Tory is at her 10,000cc mark and about to go bigger.  Last week I just posted the second chapter from "Revenge"  where Tory is still a C-cup with 600cc implants!  It's going to take a while before we see her up to 10K, again.  But, I hope you'll enjoy the transformation and the trials and tribulations which Tory has to go through before she attains 10K. 

Please post comments on my "Revenge" blog and let me know what you like from a chapter, what pushes your buttons, or what you felt didn't work.  Constructive criticism always welcome!
« Last Edit: July 19, 2016, 03:42:42 am by Shadowmuse Blown »
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« Reply #7 on: July 23, 2016, 05:22:02 am »
This is so amazing! Great job. I love all the thought she puts into everything,

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« Reply #8 on: July 26, 2016, 02:56:18 am »
^Thanks so much for the kind words, sir!

Hopefully, Tory's internal monologue, as she considers her ever-expanding chest, will add to the eroticism. 

I've just finished updating the Revenge blog with Chapter 3.  Hope you all enjoy it.  :)
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« Reply #9 on: July 26, 2016, 04:26:01 pm »
The first two chapters are perfect. My only critisizm is on the 3rd chapter you're kinda running through the fill ups too much without any description. What was great about the start was her unsurity and insecurity about it. I think if you take the 3rd chapter and give more do scripting of the fills and dialogue you could have a great 3 chapters out of just chapter 3!

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« Reply #10 on: July 27, 2016, 01:27:27 am »
The first two chapters are perfect. My only critisizm is on the 3rd chapter you're kinda running through the fill ups too much without any description. What was great about the start was her unsurity and insecurity about it. I think if you take the 3rd chapter and give more do scripting of the fills and dialogue you could have a great 3 chapters out of just chapter 3!

Yeah, I kinda understand what you're saying.  I was thinking about her mindset, too, and how I sort of just give it a general overview, rather than describing specific situations she has to go through.  We will definitely get more descriptive fills as she gets bigger, but it may be a very nice idea to go back and flesh out this chapter both in terms of the fill descriptions and her experiences.  At the time I wrote it, I believe I was just eager to get her on to the bigger sizes.

Thanks so much for the feedback!  I'm gonna let this chapter sit on the backburner, for now, but I will definitely go back and flesh it out before going to the next draft. 

You are quite right: there's a lot of stuff to explore here! :)
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« Reply #11 on: July 27, 2016, 10:18:40 am »
Great promise, I like the mix of story and erotica :) I'll echo other sentiments that there should be some more focus on the fills and other areas she is going to be bimboed up in

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« Reply #12 on: July 27, 2016, 06:47:34 pm »
I have to pace myself because your writing is just insanely erotic. I adore this!

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« Reply #13 on: July 27, 2016, 10:33:06 pm »
The first two chapters are perfect. My only critisizm is on the 3rd chapter you're kinda running through the fill ups too much without any description. What was great about the start was her unsurity and insecurity about it. I think if you take the 3rd chapter and give more do scripting of the fills and dialogue you could have a great 3 chapters out of just chapter 3!

Yeah, I kinda understand what you're saying.  I was thinking about her mindset, too, and how I sort of just give it a general overview, rather than describing specific situations she has to go through.  We will definitely get more descriptive fills as she gets bigger, but it may be a very nice idea to go back and flesh out this chapter both in terms of the fill descriptions and her experiences.  At the time I wrote it, I believe I was just eager to get her on to the bigger sizes.

Thanks so much for the feedback!  I'm gonna let this chapter sit on the backburner, for now, but I will definitely go back and flesh it out before going to the next draft. 

You are quite right: there's a lot of stuff to explore here! :)


that was my thought too
the fill ups are the key
and the most important of the story (for me and beside the story it self ;) )

I want to see the experience on her way
the excitement at the fill ups
 
she is modifying her body, she see how the boobs inflate, how the skin gets tight maybe a little redish
her boobs growing every two weeks that is not normal (and i love it)
that is nothing every body do in there everyday life
she changing her human case that accompanied her her entire previous live and has shaped her character

you have to call that back into your mind

this is something lasting influence on her life

I really, really love your story's and the details and can't wait for the next chapter


and by the way:

HOW CAN YOU DARE TO STOP THE CHEAPTER IN A FILL UP!?!?!?!

I so: "ohhh yeah nice room, wow that is hot, a pump thats good, uhhh he will fill her implants even more... wait, what!?!? NOOOOOOO"

end of the cheapter :'(
What kind of Bees makes Milk ?     Boobies!

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« Reply #14 on: July 28, 2016, 01:05:36 am »
Great promise, I like the mix of story and erotica :) I'll echo other sentiments that there should be some more focus on the fills and other areas she is going to be bimboed up in

I guess it's not surprising that members of The Perfectboobs prefer a focus on the fills, and I must say, I tend to agree.  :)  Thanks!

I have to pace myself because your writing is just insanely erotic. I adore this!

I'm so glad you like it.  Thanks for kind words!

the fill ups are the key
and the most important of the story (for me and beside the story it self ;) )

I want to see the experience on her way
the excitement at the fill ups
 
she is modifying her body, she see how the boobs inflate, how the skin gets tight maybe a little redish
her boobs growing every two weeks that is not normal (and i love it)
that is nothing every body do in there everyday life
she changing her human case that accompanied her her entire previous live and has shaped her character

you have to call that back into your mind

this is something lasting influence on her life

I really, really love your story's and the details and can't wait for the next chapter

and by the way:

HOW CAN YOU DARE TO STOP THE CHAPTER IN A FILL UP!?!?!?!

I so: "ohhh yeah nice room, wow that is hot, a pump thats good, uhhh he will fill her implants even more... wait, what!?!? NOOOOOOO"

end of the cheapter :'(

It's called a "cliffhanger"  ;)

Sorry about that!  Thanks for the feedback and the kind response!  Good points, indeed.  :D



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« Last Edit: July 28, 2016, 01:13:25 am by Shadowmuse Blown »
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