Here's my take on the question:
- I absolutely loved how all the characters acted intelligently and in control about all this. Sure, they were all crazy and they were doing dangerous stuff, but they had good reasons and dealt with it in a smart way.
- I also liked how you increased the scope of the story gradually, without unloading too much on the reader at the same time. You started small and kept growing it, always adding small elements until it was a completely different story. That made the whole work easy to understand and also gave you the option (in my opinion) to stop at any time, preventing a hanging end should anything go wrong.
- Also, thank you very, very much for giving it away for free. That is a lot of work and I can only appreciate that you provided a massive turn on free of charge. That is very generous.
As to a new story, just some thoughts I had:
- Again, please keep the scope tight. I loved the intimacy and the way the story progressed.
- If anything, maybe differentiate some of the characters a bit more clearly. Since they change a lot, they can get hard to connect to their former looks. Maybe give each one a color scheme or a unique speech bubble. That might reinforce the power of the transformation.
- When it comes to the plot, I love transformation stories, especially about characters taking control of their bodies and turning them into their dreams. The artificiality is part of the process of freeing themselves.
In no particular order, here are some more transformation elements that could come up:
- Piercings all over
- Muscles and bodybuilding (even with steroids)
- Leg lengthening
- Pussy and clit pumping
- Tongue splitting
- Tongue lengthening (Is that even possible?)
- Gaining weight for a Brazilian Butt Lift
- Bigger thighs
- Yoga and flexibility training
I'd also love some short glimpses into the characters' day to day lives, how normal people react to them and how their modifications impact their routines. (Bumping into things with newly enlarged boobs or butts, spent some time getting ready for the day or just pandering themselves.)
Finally, I am a sucker for latex outfits, including bodysuits and masks and I enjoy the idea of dressing down in public but knowing the full sexiness underneath - The lady in the streets/freak in the sheets thing.