Author Topic: Another Life (BE Story)  (Read 4343 times)

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Another Life (BE Story)
« on: July 14, 2020, 01:46:33 am »
Hi everyone! I've been writing a story on deviantart and wanted to share it with everyone here!

https://www.deviantart.com/bit-su/art/Another-Life-Chapter-1-832044936

Hope you like it. Let me know what you think!

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Re: Another Life (BE Story)
« Reply #1 on: July 14, 2020, 10:02:26 pm »
If i wore a hat i would now pull it in front of you, thank you so much and keep going pls. i hate it that people like you are so hard to find.

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Re: Another Life (BE Story)
« Reply #2 on: July 15, 2020, 06:36:13 am »
Glad to hear you like it! Thank you!

While there's people reading I'll keep writing =D

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Re: Another Life (BE Story)
« Reply #3 on: July 15, 2020, 07:00:21 am »
nice story, I hope it continues. which i think is good if you read more about how the breasts influence their daily life more and more. i would also like to read that stephanie also enlarges her breasts. :)

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Re: Another Life (BE Story)
« Reply #4 on: July 15, 2020, 08:05:49 am »
Have followed the story for a few months. Wish that she was more sexual, and erotic - teasing about what she did to herself, and what is yet to come.

Thanks.

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Re: Another Life (BE Story)
« Reply #5 on: July 15, 2020, 03:39:51 pm »
Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it a lot! I'll take any advice into consideration.

I don't want to reveal too much of what I'm thinking right now, but I have lots of ideas. I like to take every chance I get to try new things in a story, also love having multiple characters and, while Donna it's the main character right now, that doesn't really mean the whole "Another Life" it's just about her.

If you have been paying attention, I'm constantly leaving plots and characters everywhere. At some point I'll try to approach the story from a different angle and keep going from there. (although I have a soft spot for Donna xD )

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Re: Another Life (BE Story)
« Reply #6 on: July 16, 2020, 07:52:05 pm »
really good  ;)
the fill up steps from the beginning are a bit big for the start (for my taste)
half a liter steps would have been a bit more realistic
but i think we are a bit far from real life anyway   ;)
in the later stories you described the fill ups somewhat extensively
I liked that very much
for me the fill ups are the most important part  ::)
stephs dream was great  ;D

cant't wait for the next part
What kind of Bees makes Milk ?     Boobies!

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Re: Another Life (BE Story)
« Reply #7 on: July 17, 2020, 06:54:42 am »
Ha! Yeah I get it. I'm not been 100% realistic, at the end its fantasy, but I'm trying to get that balance all the time, as far as I can.

Also, I am the "bigger is better" kind of guy. I found myself fighting my instinct of writing something like "and she filled up 100000 ccs and live happily ever after, the end".

But I also enjoy the writing process and love to try new ways of telling things. I don't want to end up repeating myself over and over, so I'll try to spice things a little bit, and develop different characters.

BTW I also liked stephs dream, it was a way to write something I wanted to write without destroying the atmosphere of the story ;) tnx for commenting, I'm already working on the next chapter =D

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Re: Another Life (BE Story)
« Reply #8 on: July 19, 2020, 07:22:00 pm »
Hello,

Just got around to reading it (up to chapter 7). I like the element of competition between the two protagonists.

I did spot a few minor typos throughout, but it's not a big issue and generally nicely written. Keep up the good work.

DA

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Re: Another Life (BE Story)
« Reply #9 on: July 20, 2020, 04:02:14 pm »
it's very good, one of the best. eagerly awaiting more

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Re: Another Life (BE Story)
« Reply #10 on: July 20, 2020, 04:28:56 pm »
Thanks push2t, I'm already working on the next chapter.

Hey deux_anges thank you for the feedback! I usually try to be careful with what I'm writing and I even re-read before posting. Even so, sometimes that kind of things have happened =( Also I usually write everything in Spanish and then translate the whole chapter, it's easier for me to express my ideas that way, sometimes I do typos out of my own ignorance on the language.

If by any chance anybody sees a typo or something that sounds weird and it's simple to fix, I would gladly go back and fix it. I know the ending product it's never gonna be perfect, but that doesn't mean I shouldn't worry to make it as good as I can.

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Re: Another Life (BE Story)
« Reply #11 on: July 22, 2020, 03:30:09 am »
wow.  this is awesome.  i love the fillup scenes!
I cant wait to see where you go with this story.  the characters are interesting and the plot is a good one.  keep up the good work. ;D

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